Tuesday, June 22, 2010

Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

FRIDAY



DEAR DIARY,



TODAY CRISTY THE MOST POPULAR AND PRETTIEST GORL IN MY GRADE SAID THAT MY HAIR LOOKED NICK OMG THAT IS SO COOL SHE DOESNT GO OUT HANDING OUT COMPLEMENTS LIKE THAT.IT HAS BEEN RUMORED THAT SHE ONLY GIVES OUT ONE COMLEMENT PER DAY. MY HAIR DID LOOK NICE I USED A NEW CONDITIONER CALLED MELLON FANASY.TONIGHT I AM GOING TO MY BFF CONTINYS HOUSE I AM GOING TO SLEEP OVER.



SATURDAY



DEAR DIARY,



THE WORST THING HAPPENED LAST NIGHT CORNTINY WAS TRYING TO DYE MY HAIR BROWN BUT IT TURNED BLUE PERMANETLY NOW THAT SUCKS.WELL I DECIEDED NOT TO TELL MY MOM SO I HAVE BEEN WEARING A BLUE CAP AROUND.I THINK ON MONDAY AT SCHOOL I MIGHT DIE.I AM NOT ALOUD TO WEAR CAPS IN SCHOOL.I AM GOING TO BY BLONDE DYE AND DYE IT BACK.I GOT BACK FROM THE STORE AND WENT TO CORNEYS HOUSE AND SHE TRIED TO DYE IT BACK BUT IT DIDNT WORK AND THE WORST THING WAS THAT HER MOM CAUGHT US AND TOLD MY MOM AND MY MOMS PUNISHMENT WAS THAT FOR A WEEK I HAVE TO WALK AROUND WITH BLUE AND BLONDE SPOTTED HAIR.IN A WEEK SHE WILL TAKE ME TO THE BEAUTY PARLOR AND THEY WILL TURN IT BACK.



SUNDAY



DEAR DIARY,



TODAY IS SUNDAY AND I CAN BARELY BREATHE BECAUSE I HAVE TO GO TO SCHOOL WITH BLUE HAIR.WELL I AM SOO NERVOUS I AM SO ANGRY AT CHURCH MY OLDER BROTHER WOULDNT STOP PINCHING ME SO I KICKED HIM.MOM TOOK US AND LEFT SHE SAID IF WE EVER STARTED FIGHTING IN CHURCH SHE WOULD MAKE US GO APOLIGIZE IN FORNT OF ALL THE PEOPLE.I AM IN MY ROOM IN TROUBLE NOW.



MONDAY



DEAR DIARY,



TODAY WAS THE WORST MOST EMBARRSING DAY OF MY LIFE.WELL I CAME TO SCHOOL WITH A HAT ON I 閳ユ窋ORGOT閳?TO TAKE IT OFF MY TEACHER DIDN閳ユ┏ NOTCE THE TEACHER COLLECTED MY HOMEWORK BUT I FORGOT IT SO I HAD TO MISS RECESS THE TEACHER FINNAKLY NOTICED I HAD A HAT ON AND MADE ME TAKE IT OFF ALL THE KIDS STARTED LAGHING AND POINTING THE TEACHER MADE ME LEAVE AND GO HOME UNTIL I DYED IT BACK ONCE IT WAS BACK TO NORMAL I COULD COME BACK.WHEN MY MOM GOT A CALL HOME SHE WAS SO ANGRY SHE PICKED ME UP TOOK ME STRAIGHT TO THE BEATY PARLOR MADE THEM DYE IT BACK.I GOT BACK TO SCHOOL AND WE HAD A HUGE HISTORY TEST I WAS SO SICK I REALLY HAD TO FART SO I LET IT OUT AND ALL THE KIDS LAGHED SHE MADRE THEM LEAVE AND SENT ME TO THE PRINCIPALS OFFICE SHE GOT DISCUSTED WHEN I LET IT RIP AGAIN IN HER OFFICE AND SENT ME STRAIGHT TO THE NURSE SHE GAVE ME SOME GAS X BUT IT MADE ME HAVE TO GO POOP SO I POOPED MY PANTS AND THEY SENT ME HOME MY MOM WAS STILL ANGRY SHE MADE ME CHANGE UNDERWEAR AND GO BACK TO SCHOOL ALL THE KIDS KINDA NEW WHAT HappeneD THEY ALL LAGHED AND THAEN MY TEACHER WAS EMAILED AND SAID TO ME IN FRONT OF THE WHOLE CLASS YOUR MOM LEFTED YOU EXTRA UNDERWEAR OFFICESE OF ANOTHER ACCIDENT.EVERY BODY CRACKED UP AND JUST CPULDNT STOP THE TEACHER ASKED ME EVERY TEN MINUTES IF I HAD TO GO TO THE POTTY.I THINK I AM GONNA DIE



TUESDAY



DEAR DIARY,



I WAS WRONG TODAY IS THE WORST DAY OF MY LIFE.WELL THE TEACHERS SENT HOME A NEWS LETTER SAYING THAT IF YOUR KIDS HAVE AN ACCIDENT IT IS REQUIRED THEY WEAR PULL UPS FOR A WEEK JUST TO MAKE SURE IT DOESN閳ユ┏ HAPPEN AGAIN THE WHOLE CLASS ALL STARTED LEAVING ME DIPER ADDS IN MY DESK WELL THE NURSE SAID THT I AM REQUIRED TO WEAR PULL UPS FOR A WHOLE WEEK UGH I HAVE TO THE WORST AND MOST EMBARRSING THING OF MY LIFE.FEW I JUST WOKE UP THAT WAS ALL JUST A DREAM I DOZED OFF IN MRS.JOHNS BORING MATH CLASS.



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

omg that would suck. and that mom is a mean mom. and a mean teacher. sheesh. i think its a little to mean but the ending was funny. lol



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

toooooooo long dont feel like reading



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

Thats good but why in caps?



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

well, it's alright, but you do need to proof read, and yes why in all caps?!!?



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

k, no offense, but that all the style of a 13 year old talking on the phone to her 'bff'



if ur trying to write a story, add a little more detail. and some more complex sentence stucture.



and believe me, get a better plot then 'i got a complement!!!'



dude, who cares.



shallow...



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

it....is...SUPER!



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

a lil long. i skimmed. but it seemed good.... check grammer



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

That's pretty good! The girl in your story is around 4th grade, right? I know how hard it is to write stories. I give this one a C+ or maybe B-. She is very unlucky.



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

Good, but way too many typos!



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

First and formost....do you know who your audience is going to be? It doesn't fit well with the older generation. But, second,,,,,,please, use a 'spell checker'...and thirdly....please use lower case letters. Now, re write it ...ok? You will see why after wards. miss ellie



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

You can't possibly be serious about turning this in for a grade. NO matter what grade you're in, it's horrible. The story itself is bad, the spelling, the grammar, everything. You kinda had a good start but when you went into the farting pooping stage, it just literally "wreaked".



Is my short fictional story any good deffintlly not real?

the same diary that I found under neath the tree

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